Talk:Hurricane Shary/GA1
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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk)
I can help you with this review, since we really need to get it done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 13:59, 6 January 2011 (UTC)
The first problem I see with the article is this sentence: "Unfavorable conditions subsequently took effect, and Shary quickly began to lose tropical characteristics"
In the first part of the Meteorological history, you linked convection, which had already been linked in the lede. I'd de-link one of them. Also, can you find another word for convection, its used multiple times in the article.
Instead of using NHC so much, why don't you alternate between that and "organization". "The organization also noted that Shary would be a relatively short-lived tropical cyclone due to a forecast merge with a Cold Front in the next day or two." Instead of saying day or two, you could use "within the next 48 hours.", which would really help.
In the Preparations and Impacts section, you mention this sentence: "The Causeway, a low-lying bridge that connects St. David's Island to the mainland, was to be shut down at 7:00 p.m. local time on October 29." Is there a reference for that?
Once you fix those issues, it should be an article of GA quality. I'm not the reviewer so I can't pass it or fail it or put it on hold, but I will talk to the primary reviewer about it.
Seeing that you fixed the issues that I relayed to you the other day, and I was passed on to primary reviewer, I have passed this article. :) TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:20, 9 January 2011 (UTC)
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